Citizen of a Fallen World - 2 Renditions

Hi People, how is the week going so far? Remember the video I said I was trying to make 2 weeks ago? Well this is it below. It is my first Spoken Word video ever, so please, go easy on me o, lol.

The second video is the same Poem, but it was a live performance at the March edition of the Loud Thotz Open Poetry reading. I put it up because I remember promising that I would do better the second time around. So you guys can compare the second video to my performance here. Please, do not mind the weight loss, I already told you guys that I was ill am still recovering.

As for me, I prepare the made video to the live performance. Enjoy

1. Citizen of a Fallen World (Oral Poetry Video)



2. Citizen of a Fallen World (Live Performance)

44 comments

  1. I watched the video and i like your passion.
    I watched and i wish i could write beautiful poems.
    I watched and liked it BIG time.
    Good job, keep it up.

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    1. Eeeya, thanks. I am sure you will write beautiful poems if you determine to do so.

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  2. 1) OMG, I shuddered while i was watching the first video! Very powerful images and soo apt. I remember Niran :( very sad. I also got goose while watching both vids.

    2) I could totally feel the passion in the second video. I think your hand was just hanging in some places but it's waaayyyy better than the last vid ;) good one Atilola.

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    1. 1. Wow. So you know Niran? He was my colleague. Saw him the Friday before the weekend we got missing.

      2. Yes o, we get better as the day goes by. Thanks

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    2. Yea. I knew him from school. I still find it hard to believe

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    3. Now, I know the school you went to

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  3. You have passion for what you do!

    I had observed that from your posts, but seeing it live, convinced me.

    Weldone sistah, more inspiration to your ink :D

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    1. Eeeya, thanks so much. I really appreciate the comment

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  4. I like the live version, very passionate. :)

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    1. Really? And see me thinking differently. Thanks

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  5. Such passion..

    I can't remember the last time i crammed and recited anything like this. Maybe secondary school..

    well done!

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    1. Crammed ke? Lol. I didn't cram o, the poem was too long to cram joo. I was reading it out from the screen

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  6. its really a fallen world. those words are deep, very deep.
    welldone

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    1. Yes it is. And sadly, we can't do anything about it.

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  7. "this is not a consolation but a reality"... I LOVE this line! It's amazing how comforting faith in God can be in this troubled, fallen world

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    1. Yes o. That line carries so much weight. Without it, we are hopeless. Thanks

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  8. Oh yes, the words are dealt with so much passion, its infectious!

    I appreciate poetic peoples much cos im just a dork when it comes to poems.

    More grace sister!

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    1. Awwww, thanks. I am sure ypu can put a piece together if u explore deep into yourself.

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  9. spoken word! one of the many things i wish i could do. job well done! keep going girl.

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    1. Thanks and thanks for dropping by

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  10. So passionate! The words, the presentation, you just can't miss the feeling

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    1. Really? Wow. Glad you felt it. Thanks

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  11. Your passion certainly shines through. Live version any day.

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    1. Thanks. So you prefer the live version

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  12. Great performance......the first video gave a visual to your words making it more powerful because it gave a face to the destruction. One suggestion-lower the music so it’s just background acting as a backdrop to support you and allow the power of your voice and words to resonate and reverberate through the piece.

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    1. Hmmmm. I will use the suggestion when I am making my next video. Thanks

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  13. Thanks for always stopping by my blog, you delivered a great performance and I loved it. xoxo

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  14. Wonderful performance.

    http://thatreofsunshine.blogspot.com/

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  15. *sigh* i watch and can only hope...

    Nice!!!!

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  16. Wow, I thought the live performance was emotional until I watched the first one. Beautiful words Miss, beautiful. And for the live performance, I see you made use of hand movements, and such. Very good.

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    1. Really? Aww thanks so much for the encouraging comment

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  17. Wow! The renditions were awesome! The first one actually blew me away, with the graphics, the sounds and the powerful lines. Felt like I was watching a live documentary. Gurl, you made sense . . . and the second rendition was definitely a massive improvement on the other one you posted some time ago. Thumbs up, sis!

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    1. Yaaaayyyy, thanks o. We have no choice but to keep getting better

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  18. ITS DEEP..... VERY DEEP.

    AMAZINGLY DEEP.

    THAT ALL I CAN SAY...

    WELL DONE

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    1. Thanks so much. I really really appreciate

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  19. I appreciate the video you must have put into the video of the poem. Kudos dear! I also loved your poetry reading. Your voice was stronger. more expressive.

    p.s.I also listened/watched other presentations to compare. You did excellently well :)

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    1. Awww, now I am crying. Thanks so much. Comments like this wanna make me do more videos

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